Saturday, February 04, 2006

Footprints Of Love

She sits below the weepy willow
Waiting with shying eyes
As her lover tries fast to cover
The distance to his prize.
On the way are scattered today,
On this moonlit night,
Many a scene of splendid green
Bathed in silver bright.
Somtimes the bees up in the trees
Seem to dole out a song,
And by chance, deer seem to dance
Even as they hop along.
Run he past though however fast,
He couldn't but stop and see
That nature had with silver clad
A relief of mirth and glee.
He was late to reach his mate
And she had sadly walked away.
So he waited for some time before
He too returned in dismay.
That silver night the lovers planned to fight
With many crafts and hints
While the moon shone in full bloom
On their mingling footprints.

12 Comments:

At 11:21 PM, Blogger Gee said...

kobita is fine, brishtir moto kobita lekha hochhe dekhchhi:-P
dont u think u should explore more varied themes?

 
At 2:10 AM, Blogger Parth said...

themes r being explored too - look at the poems below :)
this was an exploration of varied rhythm and rhyme. hope all enjoy. :)

 
At 6:09 AM, Blogger Anvita Thapliyal said...

nice blog

 
At 6:38 AM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

You are good, man!.this is a brilliant piece of creativity. Keep writing for the reading pleasure of us, lesser souls( obviously only in term of writing):) Paras

 
At 11:13 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

She sits below the weepy willow
Waiting with shying eyes

Paaaarth,
dont be late to reach your mate... if you know what i mean

 
At 11:14 PM, Blogger Braveheart said...

This one is definitely not among my favourites on you blog. Yet, not bad! What does it lack? Profundity? Intensity? Something like that!

 
At 11:14 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

Parth. Sir!

We apologize for the sarcasm of the last post, even though you did not get it.

Though I had been laughing through the poem, you completely sold me with "He was late to reach his mate." Half an hour has passed and I'm still rolling on the floor, laughing.

I applaud your brilliance sir! You have a new fan.

Marry me!

 
At 11:48 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

wonderful Parth...its a nice bit of creativity...good to see u explore varied themes. but i find the last few lines a little abrupt...dont know much about poetry so would rather not say much.
and ofcourse u could think abt taking a breather now...for if u continue writing the way u do u'll have a dozen marriage proposals to choose from soon (already have 2 in ur kitty anyways!) :))
jokes apart, writing brings out the best in u, so just keep going :)

 
At 5:10 AM, Blogger Parth said...

@@Layla- i don't know wat u mean.
@@braveheart- i'll keep that in mind
@@bewra kekra- i get the sarcasm but ignore it whenever i want. like right now.
@@anon- 2 marriage proposals eh? naaah

 
At 9:35 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

Hey parth, your wish is my command, so I'm here :). To be frank, I can only catch the ideas as I have no idea of what the syntactic structure of a poem must be like. I've not been here since long, so I read all of them in one go. I liked the graveyard the most. It struck really deep, the kind that gets you thinking. And yeah, "Kissing the Flower". I don't know how many meanings you intended for it, but I found two. One literal and the other not-so-literal (of course :). That made it all the more enjoyable. I _really_ liked the last two lines.

-Buddha.
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At 2:59 AM, Blogger Tabula_Rasa said...

Dropped by...

 
At 10:10 AM, Blogger Raj said...

Hmmm...ding dong bell.

 

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